Re: Urgent - Need review of presentation abstract by COB Monday

[Tim McGrath <tmcgrath@tedis.com.au>]

I agree with Alan - this is a suitable abstract.

To add my penny's worth,..

i suggest the title 'ebXML: The new language of electronic business' may be
misleading.

para. 3. , sentences 2 & 3 do not read correctly.
how about...

"Many of these initiatives share
common requirements.  To allow interoperability amongst these services a common
e-business framework is needed.  Therefore, in November 1999, the UN CEFACT and
OASIS
organisations came together to form the ebXML  initiative and develop a global
infrastructure for electronic business, based on public, proven standards,
and being freely open to all.  It represents the only initiative of
its type in the industry today. As a result it now has the backing and
participation of large and small vendors, key industry groups around the world
from both the
EDI and XML worlds, and end-users."

(also added the concept of  interoperability and dropped a few 'globals')..


hope this helps.

AlanKotok@cs.com wrote:

> Simon, et al
>
> Good job.  Your abstract -- and I assume the presentation it represents --
> touches all the right points.  I did a little editing to add a lead sentence,
> break up into paragraphs for easier reading, and use a little more active
> rather than passive voice, but keep your ideas intact.  See below; keep or
> toss as you wish.  Best regards.
>
> Alan Kotok
> AlanKotok@cs.com
> http://myfreeoffice.com/techjournalist/
>
> p.s. Internet is a formal name and thus capitalized (or capitalised if you
> prefer ....)
>
> =================
>
> ebXML: The new language of electronic business
>
> The Electronic Business XML or ebXML initiative combines the best of the new
> Web technology with previous experience of electronic transactions, and
> promises to extend the benefits of business data exchange to companies of all
> sizes anywhere in the world.
>
> Over the last 25 years most of the world's larger enterprises have exchanged
> electronic transactions with their customers and suppliers in volumes that
> today are measured in billions of dollars. However, only those organisations
> with the deepest pockets and large support resources could afford the
> development, software, and networks needed to make it work. Now, with the
> availability of the Internet, organisations worldwide and in all sizes are
> looking to do business electronically with each other, in ways which remove
> dependencies on their trading partners and specific technology vendors.
>
> The last year has seen an explosion in initiatives to provide the
> infrastructure that enables small, medium and large organisations to conduct
> business electronically using the Internet. Many of the initiatives share
> common requirements in core infrastructure and to reduce reinvention and the
> risks of incompatibility.  In November 1999, the UN CEFACT and OASIS
> organisations came together to form the ebXML  initiative to develop a global
> infrastructure for electronic business, based on public, proven standards,
> and being freely open to all.  It represents the only global initiative of
> its type in the industry today. As a result it now has the global backing and
> participation of large and small vendors, key industry groups from both the
> EDI and XML worlds, and end-users.
>
> The first phase of this 18-month work is now nearing completion and is
> defining the framework by which all enterprises, irrespective of size,
> location and implementation will interact and do business. This presentation
> provides an insight into the ongoing work of ebXML and will discuss the
> architecture defining the framework and how the specifications for transport,
> business process, registry and repository and core components fit together.

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regards
tim mcgrath
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