RE: All 4 BP/CC Analysis Team docs

[Larissa Leybovich <lleybovich@vitria.com>]

Here are my comments on the BP and BD AnalysisOverview doc.

1. Line 173 - change 
a. From: "recommend"  To: "recommended".
2. Line 227 - "Modelling" should be "Modeling"
3. Line 228? - change 
a. From: " 3 The UMM is not an ebXML document; however, it is a significant
document"  To: "The Unified Modeling Methodology is not an ebXML document;
however, it is a significant document which is administered by the
UN/CEFACT." 
4. Line 258/259 - My understanding is that Design Time Components are
defined in the BOV section of the Open-EDI Reference Model [ISO14662E].
Line 268 - "The specifications/models for the defined business processes and
business are stored and registered in Business Libraries...". Seems that the
word "documents" or other clarifying noun is missing between the "business"
and "are stored".

5. Line 343 - change From: "an cross-functional" To: "a cross-functional"
6. Line 345 - change From "it is recommend" To: "it is recommended"
7. Line 443 - "One of the key tools to assist with the analysis are the
ebXML Business Process Analysis Worksheets..."   Replace "are" with "is".
8. Line 460 - "analyze business processes activity...".  Capitalize like
"Analyze Business Processes activity" as it is in the Fig 8.4.1.
9. Line 677 - Industry - "The BOM provides a logical categorization of a set
of processes, these processes may organized in more than one way (scheme) or
from more than one view including industry." Insert "be" after "may".
10. Line 677 - Product - "The kind of product influences the kind of product
information." This sentence is not clear.   Needs refinement.
11. 

	



Larissa Leybovich
Vitria Technology
Supply Chain Solutions
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 -----Original Message-----
From: 	Marcia L. McLure Ph.D. [mailto:marcia.mclure@mmiec.com] 
Sent:	Sunday, March 18, 2001 1:17 PM
To:	Ebxml-Core@Lists. Ebxml. Org
Subject:	Fw: All 4 BP/CC Analysis Team docs

 << File: BpWorksheets-WIP-0.9c.doc >> << File: C of Common Business
Processes.doc >> << File: E-Commerce and Simple Negotiation3.doc >> << File:
RAnalysisOverview-WIP-0.doc >> CC Team Members,
Please read my earlier email traffic below.
Attached you will find four docs that will be submitted for QR Review on
Monday from the BP/CC Analysis Team. Yes, I know, It is the weekend but if
you can find the time to review these docs and provide feedback, we would
greatly appreciate your input.
Thank you.
Best regards,
Marcia McLure
BP PT Co-Lead

----- Original Message -----
From: "Marcia L. McLure Ph.D." <marcia.mclure@mmiec.com>
To: "Ebxml-Core@Lists. Ebxml. Org" <ebxml-core@lists.ebxml.org>
Sent: Saturday, March 17, 2001 10:16 PM
Subject: Re: All 4 BP/CC Analysis Team docs


> All four docs for your draft ebXML doc library.
> Marcia
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Marcia L. McLure Ph.D." <marcia.mclure@mmiec.com>
> To: "'ebXML-CCBP-Analysis (E-mail)'"
<ebxml-ccbp-analysis@lists.ebxml.org>;
> <ebxml-bp@lists.ebxml.org>
> Cc: "'ebXML-BP@llists.ebxml.org'" <ebxml-bp@lists.ebxml.org>;
> "Ebxml-Core@Lists. Ebxml. Org" <ebxml-core@lists.ebxml.org>;
> <lms@wwnet.com>; <mblantz@netfish.com>; "Johnston, Simon"
> <sjohnsto@Rational.Com>; "Nieman, Scott"
> <Scott.Nieman@NorstanConsulting.com>; "James D. Clark" <jdc-icot@lcc.net>;
> <Anne.Hendry@eng.sun.com>
> Sent: Saturday, March 17, 2001 10:03 PM
> Subject: Re: Doc 4 of 4: Catalog of Common Business Processes
>
>
> > Yes! Here it is....the long awaited 4th document of the 4 BP/CC Analysis
> > Team documents titled: ebXML Catalog of Common Business Processes.
> > Please review as critically as the other three documents.
> >
> > Now I have a favor to ask and I am going to have to ask for your
> > understanding regarding this the final document headed out the door at
> this
> > hour. I am having very little luck creating the Table of Contents for
this
> > doc and have not yet created the Figures Table of Contents.  I also hit
an
> > unyielding wall trying to number all of the pages-landscape and portrait
> > style. I am sure there is a very easy solution to these trivial problems
> but
> > at this late hour, it is time to go home and have at least one Guiness
> with
> > my friends before St. Patrick's Day has completely faded away. You
should
> > expect that with a last name like "McLure", I must have at least one
beer
> to
> > celebrate the Day!
> >
> > Dave Welsh, one of the ebXML Magnificent, esteemed member of the Catalog
> > Group, as well as an editorial wizard, may I please ask your assistance
on
> > the matter of the Table of  Contents (both text and figures) and page
> > numbering?  Would you be willing to complete the Table of Contents and
> > numbering of the document tomorrow morning and email your edited copy to
> me?
> > I will then begin making the add, changes and deletes as they arrive in
my
> > mailbox on the returned,edited copy. If you are unable to do so, please
> let
> > me know as early as possible.  Thanks Dave.
> >
> > Now I am off to share a "Pint" with my good buddies.
> > Cheers!
> > Marcia
> >
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Marcia L. McLure Ph.D." <marcia.mclure@mmiec.com>
> > To: "'ebXML-CCBP-Analysis (E-mail)'"
> <ebxml-ccbp-analysis@lists.ebxml.org>;
> > <ebxml-bp@lists.ebxml.org>
> > Cc: "'ebXML-BP@llists.ebxml.org'" <ebxml-bp@lists.ebxml.org>;
> > "Ebxml-Core@Lists. Ebxml. Org" <ebxml-core@lists.ebxml.org>;
> > <lms@wwnet.com>; <mblantz@netfish.com>; "Johnston, Simon"
> > <sjohnsto@Rational.Com>; "Nieman, Scott"
> > <Scott.Nieman@NorstanConsulting.com>; "James D. Clark"
<jdc-icot@lcc.net>;
> > <Anne.Hendry@eng.sun.com>
> > Sent: Saturday, March 17, 2001 7:41 PM
> > Subject: Re: Doc 3 of 4: E-Commerce and Simple Negotiation Patterns
> >
> >
> > > Team Mates:
> > > Here is the promised 3rd of 4 documents titled: E-Commerce and Simple
> > > Negotiation Patterns for your review.  Enjoy!
> > > Marcia
> > >
> > > ----- Original Message -----
> > > From: "Marcia L. McLure Ph.D." <marcia.mclure@mmiec.com>
> > > To: "'ebXML-CCBP-Analysis (E-mail)'"
> > <ebxml-ccbp-analysis@lists.ebxml.org>;
> > > <ebxml-bp@lists.ebxml.org>
> > > Cc: "'ebXML-BP@llists.ebxml.org'" <ebxml-bp@lists.ebxml.org>;
> > > "Ebxml-Core@Lists. Ebxml. Org" <ebxml-core@lists.ebxml.org>;
> > > <lms@wwnet.com>; <mblantz@netfish.com>; "Johnston, Simon"
> > > <sjohnsto@Rational.Com>; "Nieman, Scott"
> > > <Scott.Nieman@NorstanConsulting.com>; "James D. Clark"
> <jdc-icot@lcc.net>;
> > > <Anne.Hendry@eng.sun.com>
> > > Sent: Saturday, March 17, 2001 4:55 PM
> > > Subject: Re: Doc 2 of 4: BP Worksheets and Gudielines
> > >
> > >
> > > > Team Mates:
> > > >
> > > > Here is the 2nd of the 4 docs titled: Business Process Analysis
> > Worksheets
> > > &
> > > > Guidelines requiring your review.  Please pay special attention to
the
> > > View
> > > > Comments notations found throughout the document as related to
> phrases,
> > > > words, footnotes etc.. Also you will see Section 14 Appendix C Open
> > > Issues.
> > > > In this section you will find unresolved issues or specific requests
> for
> > > > additional detail such as definitions.  If you can provide insight
and
> > > > assistance in any of these topic areas, please do so. It is expected
> > that
> > > > this section will not be included in the doc going to QR on Monday
but
> > it
> > > is
> > > > a useful tool for our purposes this weekend.
> > > >
> > > > I am also attaching the first document titled: Business Process and
> > > Business
> > > > Document Analysis Review.  This document was sent earlier this
> morning.
> > > > However, I just added the ccbp-analysis list to this email and we
may
> > have
> > > > picked up a few additional BP Project Team Souls and CC Project Team
> > Folks
> > > > who would also like the opportunity to review these docs.
> > > >
> > > > Thank you all.
> > > > Best regards,
> > > >
> > > > Marcia
> > > > BP PT Co-lead
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > ----- Original Message -----
> > > > From: Marcia L. McLure Ph.D.
> > > > To: ebxml-bp@lists.ebxml.org
> > > > Cc: lms@wwnet.com ; mblantz@netfish.com ; Johnston, Simon ; Nieman,
> > Scott
> > > ;
> > > > James D. Clark ; Anne.Hendry@eng.sun.com
> > > > Sent: Saturday, March 17, 2001 12:26 PM
> > > > Subject: Re: BP/CC Analysis Docs ready for your review
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > Team Mates:
> > > > Top o' the Morning to You-Happy St. Patrick's Day.
> > > >
> > > > Before you go out and celebrate this weekend with a pint of Guiness,
> > > please
> > > > find attached for your review the document titled : Business Process
> and
> > > > Business Document Analysis Overview. This is the first one of four
(1
> of
> > > 4)
> > > > promised documents you will receive throughout the day. Your input
is
> > > > valuable to us so please take some time today or tomorrow to comment
> on
> > > the
> > > > documents.
> > > >
> > > > Please review the documents on four levels:
> > > > 1)  Is the content of the document accurate and consistent
throughout?
> > Is
> > > it
> > > > consistent with its companion documents and other ebXML documents or
> > > > specifications?
> > > > If you recognize issues, please raise them now and provide a
proposed
> > > > resolution.
> > > > 2)  Are references and adjunct documents properly represented?
> > > > If not, please provide accurate titles, notations, etc. for accurate
> > > > representation in the document.
> > > > 3)  Are there editorial adds, changes and deletions needed?
> > > > If so, please identify the line, the error and the proposed change.
> > > > Lastly,
> > > > 4)  If you can supply any additional detail, definitions or
> > clarification
> > > to
> > > > this document, please do not hold back!
> > > >
> > > > I will be checking my email messages (marcia.mclure@mmiec.com)  on a
> > > regular
> > > > basis for your recommendations throughout the day and night.
> > Recommended
> > > > changes will be made to the documents as they arrive or forwarded to
> one
> > > of
> > > > our very own  'ebXML Magnificent' with the expertise to deal with
your
> > > > specific comment.
> > > >
> > > > Thank you all.
> > > >
> > > > Best regards,
> > > > Marcia
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > ----- Original Message -----
> > > > From: Marcia L. McLure Ph.D.
> > > > To: ebxml-bp@lists.ebxml.org
> > > > Cc: Anne.Hendry@eng.sun.com ; James D. Clark ; Nieman, Scott ;
> Johnston,
> > > > Simon ; mblantz@netfish.com ; lms@wwnet.com
> > > > Sent: Friday, March 16, 2001 8:34 AM
> > > > Subject: Memo: Bp Analysis Docs ready for your review
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > Dear BP and CC Team Members:
> > > >
> > > > The BP Project Team Analysis Group led by Brian Hayes has created
four
> > > > documents that will be delivered to QR on Monday March 19th. These
> > > documents
> > > > will be made available for your review Saturday morning. Please
email
> > your
> > > > comments and proposed resolutions to (marcia.mclure@mmiec.com)  no
> later
> > > > than Sunday evening 5 pm Pacific Coast Time in order for us to
achieve
> > our
> > > > March 19th QR submission date.
> > > >
> > > > Also, two conference calls have been scheduled:
> > > > Monday, March 19, 8:00 AM PST for the Analysis Team to review the
> > > documents
> > > > and submitted comments
> > > > and
> > > > Wednesday, March 21, 8:00 AM PST.  The Regularly Scheduled Analysis
> Team
> > > > meeting.
> > > >
> > > > Teleconference Access Information:
> > > >  Toll Free Number: 877-939-5307 (18 lines)
> > > >  USA Toll Number: +1-712-237-3264   (2 lines)
> > > >  PASSCODES 266233#
> > > >
> > > > We look forward to your comments. Thank you all.
> > > > Best regards,
> > > >
> > > > Marcia McLure
> > > > BP PT Co-Lead
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > Marcia L. McLure Ph.D.
> > > > MMI
> > > > 28720 Canwood Street Suite 208
> > > > Agoura Hills, California 91301
> > > > phone  818-706-3882
> > > > fax        818-706-1213
> > > > marcia.mclure@mmiec.com
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
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