Re: Urgent - Need review of presentation abstract by COB Monday

[Simon Nicholson <simonn@eng.sun.com>]

Thanks for your feedback, suggestions and editorial - it has strengthened 
the abstract. I'm still scratching my head for a good, snappy title however 
- I'm trying to avoid references to language - primarily because I feel 
"language" is over used.
How about:
"The Foundation for Clicks and Mortar"

Simon

At 09:28 28/08/00 +0800, Tim McGrath wrote:
>sorry i forgot to add that ebXML is not a 'language' as many may interpret 
>this to
>mean.  in a sense it is more a way of referring to meaning rather than meaning
>itself (e.g. more semiotics than grammar).
>
>i am still struggling with a better title, maybe...
>
>'ebXML: defining a framework for electronic business'
>
>Tim McGrath wrote:
>
> > I agree with Alan - this is a suitable abstract.
> >
> > To add my penny's worth,..
> >
> > i suggest the title 'ebXML: The new language of electronic business' may be
> > misleading.
> >
> > para. 3. , sentences 2 & 3 do not read correctly.
> > how about...
> >
> > "Many of these initiatives share
> > common requirements.  To allow interoperability amongst these services 
> a common
> > e-business framework is needed.  Therefore, in November 1999, the UN 
> CEFACT and
> > OASIS
> > organisations came together to form the ebXML  initiative and develop a 
> global
> > infrastructure for electronic business, based on public, proven standards,
> > and being freely open to all.  It represents the only initiative of
> > its type in the industry today. As a result it now has the backing and
> > participation of large and small vendors, key industry groups around 
> the world
> > from both the
> > EDI and XML worlds, and end-users."
> >
> > (also added the concept of  interoperability and dropped a few 'globals')..
> >
> > hope this helps.
> >
> > AlanKotok@cs.com wrote:
> >
> > > Simon, et al
> > >
> > > Good job.  Your abstract -- and I assume the presentation it 
> represents --
> > > touches all the right points.  I did a little editing to add a lead 
> sentence,
> > > break up into paragraphs for easier reading, and use a little more active
> > > rather than passive voice, but keep your ideas intact.  See below; 
> keep or
> > > toss as you wish.  Best regards.
> > >
> > > Alan Kotok
> > > AlanKotok@cs.com
> > > http://myfreeoffice.com/techjournalist/
> > >
> > > p.s. Internet is a formal name and thus capitalized (or capitalised 
> if you
> > > prefer ....)
> > >
> > > =================
> > >
> > > ebXML: The new language of electronic business
> > >
> > > The Electronic Business XML or ebXML initiative combines the best of 
> the new
> > > Web technology with previous experience of electronic transactions, and
> > > promises to extend the benefits of business data exchange to 
> companies of all
> > > sizes anywhere in the world.
> > >
> > > Over the last 25 years most of the world's larger enterprises have 
> exchanged
> > > electronic transactions with their customers and suppliers in volumes 
> that
> > > today are measured in billions of dollars. However, only those 
> organisations
> > > with the deepest pockets and large support resources could afford the
> > > development, software, and networks needed to make it work. Now, with the
> > > availability of the Internet, organisations worldwide and in all 
> sizes are
> > > looking to do business electronically with each other, in ways which 
> remove
> > > dependencies on their trading partners and specific technology vendors.
> > >
> > > The last year has seen an explosion in initiatives to provide the
> > > infrastructure that enables small, medium and large organisations to 
> conduct
> > > business electronically using the Internet. Many of the initiatives share
> > > common requirements in core infrastructure and to reduce reinvention 
> and the
> > > risks of incompatibility.  In November 1999, the UN CEFACT and OASIS
> > > organisations came together to form the ebXML  initiative to develop 
> a global
> > > infrastructure for electronic business, based on public, proven 
> standards,
> > > and being freely open to all.  It represents the only global 
> initiative of
> > > its type in the industry today. As a result it now has the global 
> backing and
> > > participation of large and small vendors, key industry groups from 
> both the
> > > EDI and XML worlds, and end-users.
> > >
> > > The first phase of this 18-month work is now nearing completion and is
> > > defining the framework by which all enterprises, irrespective of size,
> > > location and implementation will interact and do business. This 
> presentation
> > > provides an insight into the ongoing work of ebXML and will discuss the
> > > architecture defining the framework and how the specifications for 
> transport,
> > > business process, registry and repository and core components fit 
> together.
> >
> > --
> > regards
> > tim mcgrath
> > TEDIS   fremantle  western australia 6160
> > phone: +618 93352228  fax: +618 93352142
>
>--
>regards
>tim mcgrath
>TEDIS   fremantle  western australia 6160
>phone: +618 93352228  fax: +618 93352142
>


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